What do you think of this analogy?

I wrote this after a painful divorce years ago and the loss of my innocent upbringing. Just thought I'd share.



The flower sprouts, it seems so shy.

The leaves expand underneath the light.

A new life born for future despair,

But no one claimed that life was fair.

A flower of innocence knows no fear

But then, there is no innocence here.

The flower withers, it's substance dries,

It bows it's head and quietly dies.

What do you think of this analogy?
The analogy is excellent. Flower evokes and connotes innocence and when it withers and "it's substance dries,

It bows it's head and quietly dies." That, indeed, expresses your state of mind quite profoundly.

You may want to express it all in timeless present tense. Hence, reconsider these instance of past tense: "But no one claimed that life was fair."





good luck in your endeavors after the painful divorce.
Reply:succinct

i like it
Reply:i like it it is very sad tho
Reply:" It bows it's head and quietly dies. "



nice.



:)
Reply:Beautiful. I'm going through a divorce and I can relate. In the beginning, you think your life is over but then the clouds pass and you realize that there is life after a break up.