Would you please critic my poem?

Hoping you'll like it, give me some ideas on how to improve!!



The sun will still rise after a long winter’s night

The birds will still sing after the storm

The stars will still shine after the clouds clear

The heart will beat after being broken



The grass will grow after the undying drought

And the child will still laugh after their tears are dried

A mother will love after her child moves on

Friends will laugh after conflict



The flowers will bloom

The lips will smile

Life will go on

So why, then,

Are we afraid?

Would you please critic my poem?
I think you mean "CRITIQUE" your poem. It's okay. Kinda predictable.
Reply:i like it, but the end could use a little work...
Reply:It's really good. I can't find a fault to improve.
Reply:i absolutely love it! i wouldnt change a thing about it! dont listen to all of those rude answers! it really is good!
Reply:Read something very similiar. Be careful of infringments!!
Reply:it's okay but there's no poetic pain or work there, just a cute sounding, nice poem, you'll never make it as a poet with that - sorry but you should know.
Reply:nice....but its to happy for me but my sister liked it
Reply:i luv it. except that i wrote it

















































































































































































































































































SIKEEEEE no i didnt. it's more than good it's GREAT. don't change a thing, keep it as it is. good work.
Reply:love it
Reply:Uh, not very philosophic. If you are trying to be prolific you failed.
Reply:i love it i love"so why then r we afaid"
Reply:Its ok. It's too easy to understand.
Reply:*** 3 stars
Reply:very nice
Reply:There's a nice simplicity to the poem. However, just that is not something that makes a poem live on in the minds of the reader. It lacks that profound depth found in many great poems. Take for example Emily Dickinson and her numerous classics, what's great about her works is her knack for aphorism, or her ability to take these complex and ridiculously profound ideas and mold them into sentences that are short and concise. Other than that, the parallel structure is great!
Reply:Beautiful.
Reply:wow i luv it. your poems are like the way i wish the world really was
Reply:Hun....

I'm afraid to say this isn't your peom
Reply:OMC!!! that is really good



i can't think of anything to make it better

sry i know that doesn't help but maybe it will boost ur esteem
Reply:Tomorrow flowers will bloom

Tomorrow people will smile

Tomorrow, life will go on

So live through, tomorrow.



"Tomorrow" can be used in the start of each statement.

Good luck.
Reply:I really like this poem! :]

The only things I would re-check are these two lines

"The heart will beat after being broken"

and

"A mother will love after her child moves on"

I think those are the only two lines you can improve on, other than that, good job!
Reply:I'm not skilled or experienced enough to analyze and critique the writing itself, but I will say that your topic is one of my favorites. It reminds of William Blake, and that can't be a bad thing, can it? Well done!
Reply:Wow, I love your poem. It definitely impacted my life.
Reply:i really like it! You know, it reminds me of the song Without You from RENT. You should listen to it to get ideas.
Reply:I thought it was good, not much into poerty, probly better than anything I could write...What type of poem is it?
Reply:AWESOME
Reply:read it before
Reply:omg i loveee it its rlly hawttt and so true ur rlly good!!!!!!!!!

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