Should i enter this poem in the poetry contest?

I am out of breath from the track called youth



it has made my bones ill and my tears run dry



the flowers you gave withered and died, my bag of



optimism still hides in my closet dear friend



the lies I told have come to claim there toll



in youth I was strong, brave and now I sit dear friend



for the angel to pass by optimisms grave



the world i once loved led me astray and I



sit in wait for the angel of death



go now young friend be merry and joy but remember life is not a toy

Should i enter this poem in the poetry contest?
Go ahead and enter it in

http://www.poetry.com

Some of the poems they pick winners really defy logic.
Reply:You said it best bro....
Reply:I write poetry and have won several contests over the years.I also write music.I think that is a good poem.It is sad and I find that some people who write poems are taking about their own lives.I hope that you are not ill.I hope that you are happy and can find that joy you told your friend to have.Enter the poem and good luck
Reply:yes
Reply:Give it a shot...good luck
Reply:ofcource u should. its such a nice poem! even i am fond of writting poems! go ahead n win! i hope u win!
Reply:I'm impressed! Go for it.
Reply:yes, its lovely! you could be amoung the top three best poets in a competition.
Reply:wow..that was so beautiful..you are very gifted to be able to write like that....i wish i was good....i hope you the very best!! that poem is nice....im going to show my friend that...she would like that..i hope you come in first place and get a good prize!! :D here are some contests u can enter it on!
Reply:Well technically i guess you should try revising it a little bit. i mean it sort of confused me. so my guess is maybe
Reply:yesssss, if u dont believe in urself who will, plus at least u made the effort... etter than nothing... GOOD LUCK!!
Reply:Yes
Reply:Why not you took the time to write it out here, You never know unless you take a chance.
Reply:Very touching poem. Do some revisions to make it more musical.



Some suggestions

I'm out of breath from the race called youth

its made my bones ache and tears run dry

The flowers you gave, withered and died,

my bag of hope still eludes me

the lies I've told have claimed their toll

in youth I was strong and brave and now

I wait, for the angel to pass by hope's grave

the world, once loved betrayed me and now

I welcome death's angel



Just some recommendations. Make sure, before you send the poem to put it on spell check. Well done, and good luck
Reply:Which poetry contest?
Reply:Sorta depressing, but yep, it is good.
Reply:Yes why not, its a nice one. You should definitely send it.
Reply:I am so struck by the dismal desperation your words speak. You leave to question your plight; be it illness, old age, inescapable constraint or just eternal depression. None the less, beautiful arrangement with a great message, keep up the good work. Do you need to talk with someone?
Reply:yeah, it is quite well i think.
Reply:Yes you should.

This a very beautiful poem...so true for many youth.
Reply:yes
Reply:That's a beautiful poem. I also am a poet and do agree with a couple other posts in that you do need to revise it a bit, but definitely send it in for the contest. I hope you win! Good luck!
Reply:go for it
Reply:yes of course it is very nice maybe you are the winner
Reply:Yes, by all means give it a whirl!!!!! :)
Reply:Any poem can enter in the poetry contest. After all, its a contest for poems, right? If you are the author be proud of it! Love your work.....
Reply:Yes...it has the common universal appeal that all can related to or interpret in their own way.
Reply:You bet!! You never know how someone will react to your poetry. Never assume anything, go for it!!
Reply:Yes . it's a good one.



good luck for your poetry contest..........



Bye.